o..m..g... one of the best I've read in a long while.. excellent work, loved the flow, and the last part, especially. keep writing..! ^^

Deep.

You touch on several interesting ideas with this one. These are my interpretations. Take what you like and leave the rest.

Lines 5 and 6. Great image with the blood, definately a recurring theme in your poetry. The small destruction of self in the act of expression is powerful, and whether that destruction of self is necessary. However, it doesn't seem to fit in with the rest of what you're saying. The other primary image, the one of sight and blindness, doesn't connect to this one.

The blindness and fear. Loss of inocence? I love the last six lines. "Inhibition and broken formalities." You describe wanting to see as a child does, for the first time, a world that is completely new.

"Blind to a ...superficial dreams." Prejudgement and superficial dreams are adult constructs that obscure what else there is. Our sight narrows until we are blind.

I really like this poem. I think it's worth some extra work, added imagery and development of theme. I would like to see you describe either the world that is seen, the prejudged and superficial one, or breaking through that blindness and wonder at the first sight of the fantastic world beneath. The first would stick with your dark tone, really draw us into the fear and ignorance.

this is an awesome comeback into the world of writing poetry through the heart of broken poet...i enjoyed you reading it to me

i like the bleed my thoughts across the pate, very descriptive, nice poem