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| ttum 2005-09-10 ch 1, anon. | abusei'm not too sure about the subject matter, seems kinda overdone, overused nowadays. but you still place it well, sweet like dark chocolate and the lovely loveable last stanza. also, pops on the 'and she's not talking to you anymore/because her computer crashed.' good work oberall. |
| amphiboly 2005-05-17 ch 1,  | abusethis is really good. you are quite acynic judging from the other poems but either way you make me laugh. ((: keep writing. ((: you're going to my favs. |
| addie pray 2005-05-06 ch 1, | abuseI loved this, it got continually stronger until the ending, which was fan.tastic. The style and voice was interesting, well done. |
| Cyssel 2005-04-24 ch 1, | abuseooh haha I love the analogy of the computer. all the technical terms seem so fitting! intriguing, yay. i like this. |
| magicbubble 2005-04-22 ch 1, | abusethis is really nice. esp the first stanza. and its really humour-induced. yay! |
| only weekdays 2005-04-17 ch 1, | abusethis is really sweet, i like it! |
| reeei 2005-04-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseooh i love this one. i didnt know i love you can be represented by ilu. hahass. i thought it would be iluvu or i |
| HideAwayFairy 2005-04-10 ch 1, | abuseWow, this is really good..I have no clue what you are talking about with all the computer stuff, but I get the point of it. Very nice! |
| linaeve 2005-04-08 ch 1, | abuseoh oh just beautiful. technology has a nice way of beautifying even the most ridiculous things. gosh, photoshop. gotta love adobe. |
| negligible fictional force 2005-04-06 ch 1, | abusewe lost ourselves in our digital lives, and you, ever the divine poet, point it out. cynicism suits you like calculus. oh i do so love this. cyberspace revelations all in one go. oh i do love this. (repeats self) it really is heavenly, and oh so clever. oh gahh i am gushing. -kismet. |
| Nanashiko 2005-04-06 ch 1, | abuseNice work, I espeically love"fades into twilight mistrendered in 3dsmax pixelsno matter how fervent." Great work. PS: congrats you're in CAP. Lol i didn't try for it. |
| citrus scented 2005-04-06 ch 1, | abuseoh a very depressing poem, but I love the originality to it! Its just so freash to read osmething like this. Love the lines :"and wonder if that poemloverboy penned over MSNis copyandpasted" like your style, and your ideas! |
| really 2005-04-06 ch 1, | abusem hiZ. >< WELCOME BACK, YO. i like the second stanza. the first part of the third stanza sounds good but looks weird. >< i suppose it happens all the time. but i like the idea behind it. and it's so material i can easily imagine it. (: WELL DONE. |