love the finishing sentance

Loved it Loved it and Loved it more. I want a sequel where one of their children go back to Ireland or something. Great story.

Aw such a sweet story!

xx

I hate to say that I'm one of those people who reads without reviewing, but I am. In your case, however, I feel compelled to respond, in a good way, of course! Firstly, I can practically see Laura's head popping and her wrist flicking like a New York street girl, and I love it! The fact that you can give that impression without explicitly stating Laura's expression is awesome and noteworthy. The second reason for this review is that, unlike a lot of original fiction that ends up being just decent if you're avoiding your homework, I can actually see this story being pulled from the site and actually published. If that's your ultimate goal, then more powah to yah, girl!
Happy writing,
TomatoFace :D

Aw!! I love it! Its really good!

Naw, absolutely not cornball. If your story was cornball then any story would be cornball. Every love story happens like that. You've progressed wonderfully. However, it does seem odd how Matthew always seems to save her (the "lake" and in this storm)... Maybe you should change that a bit?...

But here was one sentence I could not understand: "His wet shirt stuck to his arms and chest, showing off his finely toned muscles." Somehow I can't imagine Matthew with "finely toned muscles". It just doesn't seem realistic. I know you're trying to get him to sound like the perfect hero but this isn't Matthew's taste. Especially since he is a doctor and all.

Anywho I had to stifle an amused laugh when I read of another parallel between you and Jane Austen's book. I've never read the book Sense and Sensibility (just watched the movie) but there is a part where Mr. Willoughby saves Marianne in a storm, her leg broken. lol.

I've been waiting forever for that kiss. ^^ Yes, Matthew is slowly beginning to poke out of his shell. So glad!

In answer to your question, no, there was definitely nothing "corny" about this chapter! My heart sort of caught in my throat when I read (or should I say "lived"?) the conversation between Matthew and Laura. I myself believe that I am falling more in love with Matthew as I go. And especially now my heart is at its breaking point when I hear of Matthew's despair. I can see him...and wish I can hold out a hand, say something... He seems so much like a character I am trying to work out. He too is a doctor, serious in some ways, intelligient in others, smart, quiet, but also charming. If you won't mind, I'll be taking pointers from you. ;)

One thing I did not understand... Why did Laura try to make Matthew jealous?

Love how the romance just keeps building up! I let out an inward scream of delight when I learned this chapter was another one concerning Laura and Matthew. Some authors on fictionpress skip the development of love, and move to the action. So sad, isn't it? But excited that yours is otherwise!!

--It's great that you set the story in Ireland. For me, Ireland has always been a place of great beauty and wonders. The blue coastline. The high mountains. Those green valleys. And those bagpipes...or is that Scotland? (lol.) But it's their freedom that's most important. In America, life was by far much more stifling. Most people lived by the expectations of society. Perhaps this is true of Matthew... He's so..stoic. But now, under the influences of Ireland (and Laura), he finally seems to be living!! ^^

--It was humorous how Laura got him to dance. ;)

Loving this story so far.
writtenwordsaremagic

A wide grin stretched across my face when I was reading this. I'm glad to see that Matthew (I think it will be easier to just call him this) is actually smiling! And how he is able to recite the same poem as her... *silly smile* More to the serious doctor than we all thought.

It's perfect how you introduced Mr. Rochester! I was able to take in his personality completely. I feel so sorry for the poor man. It seems like he hasn't had an ounce of enjoyment at all after his wife died. But that's where Laura comes in!! ^^

Laura is indeed a unique girl, as you so put her. I've mulled over many things, but not quite as many deep thoughts as she. It'll be great to see what she might teach the children.

I love how you began this, and I love how you ended this. Especially the last sentence: "leaving her to grow under a widow's roof in the small, Irish town of Edenbrook." It doesn't signify anything special, but there's something about it that gets me to thinking about old classic stories and whatnot. lol. Enough of my tangents. Back to reading.

;) writtenwordsaremagic

Aww, that was so sweet!

Sigh. I am so jealose. You know what, I will work my best to be as good as you. I think that out of all... well... most of your stories this is at the top!