Reviews for Among the Hills of Edenbrook: FINISHED

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writtenwordsaremagic 2008-07-02 ch 15,	abuseNaw, absolutely not cornball. If your story was cornball then any story would be cornball. Every love story happens like that. You've progressed wonderfully. However, it does seem odd how Matthew always seems to save her (the "lake" and in this storm)... Maybe you should change that a bit?... But here was one sentence I could not understand: "His wet shirt stuck to his arms and chest, showing off his finely toned muscles." Somehow I can't imagine Matthew with "finely toned muscles". It just doesn't seem realistic. I know you're trying to get him to sound like the perfect hero but this isn't Matthew's taste. Especially since he is a doctor and all. Anywho I had to stifle an amused laugh when I read of another parallel between you and Jane Austen's book. I've never read the book Sense and Sensibility (just watched the movie) but there is a part where Mr. Willoughby saves Marianne in a storm, her leg broken. lol. I've been waiting forever for that kiss. ^^ Yes, Matthew is slowly beginning to poke out of his shell. So glad!
writtenwordsaremagic 2008-07-02 ch 13,	abuseIn answer to your question, no, there was definitely nothing "corny" about this chapter! My heart sort of caught in my throat when I read (or should I say "lived"?) the conversation between Matthew and Laura. I myself believe that I am falling more in love with Matthew as I go. And especially now my heart is at its breaking point when I hear of Matthew's despair. I can see him...and wish I can hold out a hand, say something... He seems so much like a character I am trying to work out. He too is a doctor, serious in some ways, intelligient in others, smart, quiet, but also charming. If you won't mind, I'll be taking pointers from you. ;) One thing I did not understand... Why did Laura try to make Matthew jealous?
writtenwordsaremagic 2008-07-02 ch 11,	abuseLove how the romance just keeps building up! I let out an inward scream of delight when I learned this chapter was another one concerning Laura and Matthew. Some authors on fictionpress skip the development of love, and move to the action. So sad, isn't it? But excited that yours is otherwise!!
writtenwordsaremagic 2008-07-02 ch 9,	abuse--It's great that you set the story in Ireland. For me, Ireland has always been a place of great beauty and wonders. The blue coastline. The high mountains. Those green valleys. And those bagpipes...or is that Scotland? (lol.) But it's their freedom that's most important. In America, life was by far much more stifling. Most people lived by the expectations of society. Perhaps this is true of Matthew... He's so..stoic. But now, under the influences of Ireland (and Laura), he finally seems to be living!! ^^ --It was humorous how Laura got him to dance. ;) Loving this story so far. writtenwordsaremagic
writtenwordsaremagic 2008-07-02 ch 8,	abuseA wide grin stretched across my face when I was reading this. I'm glad to see that Matthew (I think it will be easier to just call him this) is actually smiling! And how he is able to recite the same poem as her... silly smile More to the serious doctor than we all thought.
writtenwordsaremagic 2008-07-02 ch 5,	abuseIt's perfect how you introduced Mr. Rochester! I was able to take in his personality completely. I feel so sorry for the poor man. It seems like he hasn't had an ounce of enjoyment at all after his wife died. But that's where Laura comes in!! ^^
writtenwordsaremagic 2008-07-01 ch 2,	abuseLaura is indeed a unique girl, as you so put her. I've mulled over many things, but not quite as many deep thoughts as she. It'll be great to see what she might teach the children.
writtenwordsaremagic 2008-07-01 ch 1,	abuseI love how you began this, and I love how you ended this. Especially the last sentence: "leaving her to grow under a widow's roof in the small, Irish town of Edenbrook." It doesn't signify anything special, but there's something about it that gets me to thinking about old classic stories and whatnot. lol. Enough of my tangents. Back to reading. ;) writtenwordsaremagic
Aria Deloncray 2008-05-12 ch 21,	abuseAww, that was so sweet!
Kaybookworm 2008-05-03 ch 21,	abuseSigh. I am so jealose. You know what, I will work my best to be as good as you. I think that out of all... well... most of your stories this is at the top!
Rome's Daughter 2008-03-29 ch 14,	abuseNow this is nice! I just love cold handsome guys! Matthew is perfect! The mysterious American doctor...I love him. But so does Laura. Shucks. I really liked that little conversation they had about politics. Americans are so awesome! And the government WAS a great one... Anyways! I'm off to read the others! I love the story!
EdwardDazzlesMe 2007-11-04 ch 21,	abuseOh, good. I thought you were really going to let her die for a while there! I would've had to virtually slap you! Anyway, great story! I'm glad I took the time to read it. :) It was well written and believable. God has blessed you with a great talent, and it should be shared with the world! :) Keep it up! EdwardDazzlesMe
EdwardDazzlesMe 2007-11-04 ch 1,	abuseStupid Bridget.
Erisah Mae 2007-10-28 ch 21,	abuseThis was very sweet- I adored the character of Laura and your descriptions of how she saw the world, and the development of her relationship with Rochester was very well done... although I was curious as to why the teacher that replaced Laura was never seen... His input might have been interesting, and perhaps a little more action with Derrick, to show how he felt about events might have been a good idea. I did enjoy this, however. Nice work ;) Erisah
ophelia 2007-09-06 ch 21, anon.	abuseim guessing youve read jane eyre...u used the same names like jane and mr rochester and the scene with the tree split into two...but i must admit i still liked ur twist on it..good job

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