 braggart 2005-04-07 . chapter 1I really like the use of parenthesis here. Without a doubt, they give a poem that extra oomph when used correctly. I also like how "normal" this poem is. I don't know if that's a good word use, but it's just very mellow and quietly affecting. That said, I felt that the last two lines could've been a bit stronger. I enjoyed this, so good job. |