Very cool - delicate and beautiful.

lovely

Wow this is a nice piece... I've not been there so it doesnt really hit home fully but the structure is great. I'm also LOVING this old keyboard I'm using in a library, it's so different to those new ones, it's got give and texture and feels like it's really closer to an extension of my body than the new ones too... Just great, keyboard and poem both.

soft?

beautiful. delicous title to, just as great as the poem its self. you really capture a wonderful atmosphere.

It, itself, reminded me of a scent almost; the shape, the shortness (obviously because it's a haiku but..) it was so perfect. If that's the word.

lovely. people find it hard to stick to rigid structures but you fantastically shove beauty, not ungently, into rockhard format. love it i do. -kismet.

Interesting. I like how well you wrote it. From what I've seen, the tanka format is often abused and garbled, but you seemed clear on what you were doing.

Nice.

oo, nice imagry with this one. very cool.

~Hip

Again you beautifully posses an amazing mood through out. You are very talented.

Juliet.

so beautiful...

Gah, I love your diction. You really create quite an atmosphere in this one - still, but intense. I LOVE that line about hummingbird wings. Brilliant work.

Ive been there, only a few people will really feel for this one, but those who do will feel it right where it counts. Nice job.

This is not a haiku, but it is still lovely. Delicate and dear. Splendid!