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| clockwork Kiss 2005-08-01 ch 1,  | abusegorgeous. the nature imagery is purely romantic. just as lovely as Keats or Shelley. nice semi-rhyme at the end, feels couplet-like and ends the piece with a great flow. second line is beautifully original. great work. you use this format fabulously. |
| Eirien 2005-06-23 ch 1, | abuseAbsolutely beautiful descriptions. I especially like the image of "honey-bitter thoughts", it might even be a word play/ an allusion to honeysuckle in the context of the summer landscape you depict? |
| pneumothorax 2005-06-04 ch 1, | abuseSimple and light, it works well. |
| Manuel Fajar 2005-04-23 ch 1, | abusenacreous moon hides, all her passions in the sky, patiently she bides, for her lover who's quite sly, smoothly she pulls tides, knowing gravity will try, pull together sides, though at times they may be shy, there's no deeper love to spy. |
| Snowflake Baby 2005-04-11 ch 1, | abusethis is such a georgous poem! really delicous read its so beautiful and captures the feeling so well. |
| youzi 2005-04-09 ch 1, | abuseBeautifully written!Loved especially 'blooming blood-carnation shells' and 'honey-bitter thoughts'. Nicely cone. keep writing =D |
| AboveTheSalt 2005-04-09 ch 1, | abuseM, this is quite sweet. Now I find myself wishing for summer & all its grace. I've never seen this style; choka, you say? It worked very well, eloquent words & charming ideas. Second stanza = favorite. No, nevermind, I love the whole thing. :) |
| if sighing 2005-04-09 ch 1, | abuseFirst line definetly drew me in, especially the word "ladybird." I love the pairing of words in this poem. It's different, original, a yet perfect a beautiful. honey-bitter a lovely contrasting image |
| tablesalt 2005-04-09 ch 1, | abuseAmazing imagery. I love the rhythm that runs through the entire poem. Keep it up! |
| Aslan Israel 2005-04-08 ch 1, | abuseVery descriptive. Wonderful job. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-04-08 ch 1, | abuseperfect. lovely |
| Youneek 2005-04-08 ch 1, | abuseIt's short, but it's full of beautiful imagery. Greatjob. |