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| Multicolored Berry 2007-06-18 ch 1,  | abuseOh, god, I do hate homework. I can empathize with you regarding this, as I'm sure any teenager can. It gets to be awful, doesn't it? "I just want a little space to breathe" indeed! It feels like they're trying to work us to death sometimes. I like this a lot, but you should go over it briefly. Maybe you left out the question mark in the fifth line on purpose, but if you did the reason is not immediately apparent and that's not good. But, anyway, great job! |
| Amaya Kasumi 2006-11-27 ch 1, | abuseI agree with that. Oh and when someone leaves a review i take what they say into consideration so i will try to in corrprate the marrage thing into the next chapter and the mother thing will be in a later chapter. |
| Jinks 2006-08-25 ch 1, | abuseI am reviewing. Just typing something to show Matt. People do answer reviews sometimes. If the do they generally answer them in their storyies at the beginning or end in author notes.Does that answer your questions?OK |
| dancingintheshadows 2005-10-25 ch 1, | abuseLovely last line. Teachers and their homework giving...[mumbles in frustration] ~dancingintheshadows Thanks for the review. She doesn't have a name in the beginning chapters because a a person who is to be Proven is not considered whole until they have been Proven. Since to their people a name is part of a person, they can't recieve on until they are whole. Neairta only recieved hers before hand because well, blame teenage hormones. :) |
| Sacred-Phoenix-Nephthys 2005-10-17 ch 1, | abuseYeah...lol...i 'love' it wen i get many assignments due on the one day...it suck **...never the less...this poem was good and i liked it^_^ |
| Mithril-Moony 2005-08-19 ch 1, | abusethe first part of the second line doesn't really make sense and there are two mistakes in the fifth line but it's very true and nicely formatted. good job! |
| kAIT REDFERN 2005-07-18 ch 1, | abuseEnjoyed the sarcasm in line four. Good layout and use of retorical questions. Also, a really valid point. I can't wait till we reach the end of that rainbow. Good work. Luv Kaitx |
| machmev 2005-06-08 ch 1, | abuseI like this little freestyle, but you should double check your spelling there. :p |
| Skyla Moon 2005-06-01 ch 1, | abuseHehe that sums up my questions very nicely. And it's oh-so-wonderful having five assignments due on the same day. Nice poem! |
| and calliope said 2005-04-09 ch 1, | abuseTotally true.Hey, I'm reading 'Knightesses!' Are you the same person? |