Wow. You need to think more often! Lol! Just kidding! I STILL want you to mail me an autograph!

The rhythm was fun and wavered by just a few syllables in a couple lines here and there, not enough to worry about. I enjoyed, and smiled at the light-heartedness.

hm...let see...rain to boes ot flying (wings) to sea to chains to mountains to tears to cloth to time to nothing...interestinf thought pattern...it seems to come full circle despite the turmoil of random thoughts coming forth like jets of steam in the night...i like it...good babbling...some parts really stood out...and thats what made the poem good...just like life...most of it is crap..but there are some parts that stand out and make all the difference...cyanide...

don't really like long poems but whatever. This was really catchy, and every line I read here actually made me feel like I didn't waste anytime. Great job Hip!! -ADD

This is so thought provoking...It seems open to the readers interpretation, and I quite like that. Nice rambling. XD

Powerful and passionate, I love the depth that you created here. Wonderful, keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.