Just fabulous.

wow those last two lines are just amazingly thought-provoking. this is so different to your other poem, but i like it just as much. A very thoughtful point you bring up; and it works wonderfully as a poem too.

gbralt this is kind of difernet style to your rst if oyu dont mind me saying flower i love hwo yu are saiyng os mcuh in such a silte space i am jealous you btich/ bastar ( ia m never to usre wheter you are a guy or gilr but i problaby would go for a girli dont know why exactly anyway wel doen)

very true, but then again, you know what they say about history-Those who don't learn it are condemned to repeat it.

Hmm... that was strange. Quite profound, i think, and i like the rhyme at the end!

interesting & very true

Mm, this piece is excellent through and through, straight down to the parenthetical fragment at the end. "Obsessed with old deaths" < I particularly enjoyed this line, due almost solely to the fact that I don't see many people (at least FP'rs ;P) who would even think to put the meaning of that line in such an eloquent grouping of words. And as for my comment about your commentary, I didn't mean it exactly how it probably sounded. I actually wholly agree that constructive criticism is important, it was just your manner that caught my eye (don't get me wrong, it actually kind of gave me a chuckle), "come on, give me a challenge" I believe it was something like that. Anyhow, keep it up.