nice but needs to be longer!

o.. Really interesting, you should post a chapter two up sometime...soon

WTF! nu that was short lol way to short i liked it very much err the little bit of it :P

you should really think about making it into a story cause the start was great. My fav bit was.

"The silence was suddenly broken by the thunderous sound of racing hooves. The pack of horses and their riders galloped down the street, halting sharply outside the tavern. Curious people looked out of window and doorways."

It seems so real your talent shines please add more please! *puppy dog eyes* please?

Totally cool! Are you going to continue or is this a one shot deal? I loved it!

i liked it... it was really short butt... yeah. great job for a short chapter... please write more!

*Lauren