 Pixiedust Visions 2009-06-13 . chapter 1Nice. *Grin*
I absolutely loved it. May I inquire as to the inspiration for this piece? |
 Strangely Natural 2008-03-13 . chapter 1*slack-jawed* wow that was just, woah, amazing, is that why they sent in the King's brides naked from then on, to avoid assassination? hm freaky. |
 Hed in the Cloudz 2008-02-19 . chapter 1Satisfying little end, certainly. I'm not entirely sure why I clicked on this story, but I did like it quite a bit, and that last line was priceless! It almost seems as if you could write an entire novel with this character.
You do seem to get a bit mixed up with tenses and punctuation, though. When she's killing the king, especially, you go from past to present tense, and the dialogue throughout is strangely punctuated and sounds choppy. I'd say the lines out loud and then write it the way that it sounds best, if you choose to revise it. |
 Sercus Kaynine 2007-10-13 . chapter 1This was a good story. It was... chilling, if you get my drift. I can't say I blame her. Who came up with that rule, any way?
Anyways, nice work, keep writing! |
 Erisah Mae 2007-09-09 . chapter 1 Cold. The poor girl would probably get assassinated soon afterwards, but at least she made a brave statement.
Very nice.
Erisah |
 Broken Waiting Angel 2006-02-23 . chapter 1Oh. wickedly scary! I like this girl. I'd probably do the same if I were her. >_> Feminism is a damn good way of life. It's how I started to get my backbone with men. gr...
But!! Awesome work! :D |
 Pixie in a Birdcage 2006-02-09 . chapter 1Hahaha! I love the main character! |
 ebbster 2005-04-30 . chapter 1Nice! I liked that one alot! |
 Eliazia B.K 2005-04-13 . chapter 1Amazing, keep up the goodwork |