It's great to read great work. I really admire how you wrote the last portion of the story, the tying of loose ends. Hathor showed so much growth and Sobek, a great deal of strenght as well as "heart"; it makes you think that maybe he can feel something more than just indifference. I really admire your writing style as well.

I really like this story. I think Hathor's reactions, however selfish they may be, are believable and suit her personality. I like that she undergoes personal growth over the time gap and regrets past actions. Khnum is so demure, delightfully contrasting with Hathor and Ra, two obviously strong characters. This contrast is also picked up apon in the later scenes between Hathor and Sobek, the former emotional for the loss she had caused, the latter not knowing what he has lost. Khenti brings welcome humour, plus Horus makes a cameo :) Overall, well done.