I love your style of writing, its simply hilarious... have u ever read the Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy? That's what it reminds of. Good stuff, keep updating!

wel, you want som construstive criticizm you got it. First of all, you tend to jump around alot, first he's propoosing then suddenly he's playing tomb raider and turinging down tickets? I got confused. Your kokes were good, but you lost a few because of your comma placag. I did that too when i first started, too many commas. As for the jokes, I write my own comedies, (see my story the crazy thing called love if you want to see how funny I can be.) And I would be glad to write a few jokes and gags for you. I'm sorry if i was a little harsh, bt that's the woderful world of writing for ya!`more cowbell!` Homey