AH!okay, I am SOSOSOSOSOSO Sorry this took so long!I'm a very very bad, very HORRIBLE procrastinator!But I'll say this - I LOVED it!Ha! Esp your almost flawless writing, as usual...electormagnetic disruptor, huh? (winks)Okay, that one was a scrambler and came in e form of a bullet-like thing, so... :DHrm...I loved the chracterization, it was done VERY well.And I see influence of TT in Shadow's powers and Ghost's attitude, if nothing else, but it was used to a very good edge.I suppose it's not very fair of me to demand an update since I took so long to review this, but... heh, well... :)GOOD JOB!And once again, SORRY!-Nat / FBG

heh hehThat was good.I feel really sorry for Shadow, and that princess seems to be used to having whaterver man she wants, which makes sense.Write more!

WHY DO THESE CHAPTERS EVER HAVE TO END?! This was intense, and I loved every bit of it! The action was heart-pounding great and you STILL manage to get characterization in there! It's awesome!!

You're writing style is wonderful...don't ever change it! It's great to read and you give proper detail to everything that's happening. Everything fits just enough so you know enough but not too much. (If that made any sense at all.) Anyway, this is great and I'm really enjoying this! You've most definately got a reader, so I'll be on the look-out for your next update!

~RoseSama35~ The queen forever questing...

I really enjoyed reading this! Subtle, but intreging at the same time. And I can already see the great characterization that you have and the contrast of Ghost and Shadow to Andy. Great job!

I also like the way you give hints to the type of society that the story is set it. I do, however, wish you could have described the house that they were in, though it didn't seem to be necesary in this chapter. So I'll let it slide for now!

~RoseSama35~ A queen forever questing...

Well, I must say that this is indeed a fine plot. The characters and their powers are impressive. And that Princess. You sure know how to write a character that gets under your fingernails.

However, as with everything, there are some problems. One thing that I am sure to mention to every person I find writing a story is the neccesity to proofread each and every chapter once it's done. This keeps things like this from happening: "...jumping over the fallen door, but when he tried to open it, he found it was locked." If it was knocked down, how was it locked? It will also help with some of your syntax errors (having a sentence start in one time frame (either past, present, or future) and ending in another).

Also, I would suggest describing the environment a little more. You are very good at conveying emotions and the actions of the characters themselves, but when it comes to their physical environment I find that your story is lacking. For instance, when Andy was showing Acople her room you never once mentioned what it actually looked like. Was it, in fact, a run down peice of crap, or was it a very lavish room, although still not up to the Princess's standards?

But don't get me wrong, I loved reading these two chapters and I hope that you write more. These are just the areas that need some work to make this story truly great.

PS> Sorry for the long review, I have a habit of over analyzing and ranting. :)

Oh.. great characterization! I loved it. Will be watching for more! -FBGPS: will try to e-mail ya soon. I'm sitting for finals again, so am kinda busy. well, ttyl! And keep writing!