| Reviews for Big Sister |
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cum4meSpence 4/26/10 . chapter 1i like this poem, it's very touching. I have often felt like i have been asking for help but it falls on deaf ears. |
daphnegray78 4/13/05 . chapter 1I can *completely* relate. Very well written, too. ;) Good job. Daphne |
Simply Stupid 4/12/05 . chapter 1Wow! This really is great! I love the lines "Big Sister, can’t you see?Little Sister's drowning". However, again, some of it may benefit from being condensed. Some of the stanzas are not needed. You are doing very well on the theme of your problems and how she isn't there, and then you suddenly flip to about how she's gonna get married, and her possible problems, but I'm not sure this fits. I think it should stay focussed on little sister and her problems. I hope I'm not being overly critical. Don't get me wrong, it's a fantastic poem! |
Hercules 4/12/05 . chapter 1I am touched! This is so sugary sweet! I am the 'Big Sister', though I am not married yet. Ah, I wonder what's with 'Little Sister' now? |
thedarkthatiwas 4/12/05 . chapter 1Neato, I like this one, really really nice. V/good!Now... about the poems for the comp. I like them both so much! It's really hard for me to choose... I think either would be good entries. Maybe Sleep Sweet Angel? Honestly, they're both very good. The topic of that one just appeals to me. |
Skyla Moon 4/11/05 . chapter 1Wow - this is very good. |
zzzoom 4/11/05 . chapter 1Nice poem. It's funny how we drift apart over time, but need each other even more. Great work, it was very touching. |