Excellent writing. The imagery is stunning, draws you in and such. I half-agree with the message here. I get bloody tired of "pain-pain-PITY ME-i'm just so abused-glomp!1" stuff, but I've been in the same position and have used poetry as pure release, and not cared if it's angsty. Either way, I really loved this.

LOL @ "Amen." Exactly how I feel.

I like how you capitalized the important words (how I think English should be, but isn't) "Woven in the Great Design."

I can't believe how well you made this rhyme--or, rather, you didn't even *make* it rhyme: it rhymes naturally and isn't forced at all. The way it moves isn't forced, either--it flows very well.

Nice imagery, too: "Drenched in ashes, painted black" lets us see it, and feel it too.

I really like this poem, and I'm off to read more. =)

Amen. (Sorry, I couldn't resist.) Sadly, decent poetry is near the point in its life where it, too, shall breathe its last. So much of the "poetry" on this site is "black this, black that, tears this, blahblahblah I hate my life, why did you leave me" etc. And none of it rhymes! Not that rhyming is everything, but when a poem lacks substance, organization, rhythm AND rhyme, well...it's no longer a poem then, is it?

Thank you for sharing this with us. It's taken a load off my chest just reading it.

-Leila

i like this one a lot!! very well written, i wish i could write like that :D

Great images...you've made your peace with alliteration...great poem and message you have become extremely talented CMF

There are different types of poets, some use poetry as a sort of "release" at least that is what those who do that tell me. I know what you mean though.

Once again, your beautiful ability with the English language has made me deliriously happy. Everything that leaves your fingertips makes me smile, because it is so delicately written. Well done, well done! You've succeeded in shocking me with your poetry once more! Keep it up!