You're a very inspirational writer, and I hope that someday you'll find someone. I had found someone, but I lost him. I just walked right on by, trying to not even look at him, and I lost him. He came after me, and I lost him. So, I hope things get better for you. Good luck, and may the voice in your head that isn't really yours be your guide.

I have read ur story and enjoyed it what happens next, did she leave him (narrator)or did she stay. What other dramas occurs i'm intrigued keep writing, i like the plot.

da other guy seems like a true dick n da chick doesnt seem worth it if shes fallin for the other guy!hope u find true love!

Hey man, that's really deep! You guys sound like you're pretty young, and young love can at most times be naive. Don't get in to things too deep too soon, you'll only get hurt. Take it from an old timer like myself. I'm assuming this story is based on real life, I'm right hey?!

Your story is heartfelt, emotional and amazing. It explains what love is like and the situations we can be in. we all feel this way sometimes and its great to know that someone out there can explain this topic to us. I know that the girl you're talkin about loves you and i hope you keep writing about this experience so we all know how you deal with the situations thrown at you and hoping that you will give us advice too.

U know me, u really intrigued me and inspired me. maybe bring out her emotional characteristics and how she reacts to ur emotions. In Chapter 3 explain the setting of the story a bit more. continuously write more chapters i want to see what happens.

i think it is great, you have a great plot, it seems like it is frm real life, so maybe try to sound alittle less stalkerish