This is good. I really like this one;I can relate to this. It reveals vulnerability, and it shows how all of us can get weak from pretending to be something we're not..

Love,Shay

Perhaps make the syllables a bit more even in each line. Otherwise, I like the focus on identity/humanity.

i can really relate to this...espcially around my family...they want someone perfect and i cant give them that..i liked it very good poem~*~Ana~*~

awesome. it has a powerful rythum to it and the words and meaning so bold- a very strong poem which contrasts to what its saying; but awesome ending. love it.

Very true. We may be human but are expected to be and do more.

Very nicely written!! The rhyming flowed well, and your language use was great^^ i enjoyed reading!

keep writing!

Beautiful work as always.

~the-unimportant-item

I identify with this poem most sincerely! My favorite lines are "Exposed, my flaws lay cold and bare, Revealing when I didn’t care." I went through a stage where I really just didn't care about anything: whether I lived or died, whether I passed or failed - anything! And I look back on those months and just feel so ashamed. Especially now that I'm getting ready to graduate so many people have come up with compliments and saying what a good influence I've been and I feel so hypocritcal because I know who I really am and how I could never really deserve that praise. This is so wonderfully done. You truly ought to be proud. Keep Writin'! ~*Mettie*~

Wonderful job on this. Just beautiful. Humanity is just one of those things, ya know...

Aww. I can so relate to this. Especially the first line, the 6th and 7th lines, and the last three lines. That's like half the poem!

It reminds me of the thing that I wrote "Murder of Innocence" concerning. That's not a bad thing! Sometimes it is good to be reminded of our faults and our sorrows. ItAnd it's a good sign that you are tapping into the universal human experience. In other words, people can relate.

Your poetry has greatly matured since I started reading your posted works. That's really good, especially for such a short time. Keep it up!

this is really good, but really sad, it kind of upset me, but also wanted to take a stand against abuse, great work, thank you for sharing

Aw I love it. It explains my life as I'm living it now. I love the words that you chose to use the really help put the feeling into the poem. Great poem! Keep it up!

wow this is so great and explains only too well imperfections of human nature and I can relate so much. Keep up the good work.~*.:NightDragon:.*~