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| dreamshell 2008-07-02 ch 9,  | abuseI don't suppose there's any possibility that you'll write more of this? 'Cause I really like it so far. --Shell-- |
| Mbwun 2005-08-24 ch 1, | abuseExcellent start. The story has a fascinating setting, and your writing is quite solid, though there are some mistakes and flow issues--and one paragraph that's in first rather than third person narrative. I'll definitely be reading more of this one, though. |
| Scraper 2005-06-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is so good! I loved the whole setting! This is pretty unusual with the strange creatures and everything! |
| JaveHarron 2005-05-30 ch 9, anon. | abuseOkay, A VERY cool chapter you have here. I loved the way you described the machines. "That they’re just people that got hit with a Hot-Bomb." Fallout reference? |
| AaronTilmeran 2005-05-06 ch 6, anon. | abuseokay, just read this all in one sitting in school comp lab. i should be studying for AP tests now, but seems you got a VERY good story here. looks like it might make a nice campaign setting. |
| JaveHarron 2005-04-23 ch 6, anon. | abuseHOL-EE! KEEP IT UP, CAM! THIS IS A ** GREAT CHAPTER! |
| JaveHarron 2005-04-20 ch 5, anon. | abuseOkay, very cool way to end the chapter. I like the description of the world a bit more as well. |
| JaveHarron 2005-04-17 ch 4, anon. | abuseCool chapter, and VERY interesting mechanical designs here. Reminds me a bit of the Abomination Machine. |
| JaveHarron 2005-04-12 ch 3, anon. | abuseHOLY CRAP! Quite a surprise. Post historic, steampunk, fantasy, jazzpunk, and possibly pulp and Lovecraft in one story! Keep this one up. Don't let it go the way Jinchu did...or Very Bad Things may happen. |