I often point out that FictionPress poetry is full of vague pronouns (I, you, he, she) and vacuous emotion wrapped together and presented like a poem whose reading is as satisfying as eating a rice cake.

Here you have I and you and not even knowing the word to express an emotion; yet it works. For "Worn": bravo.

Nevertheless, I encourage you, in future works, to pull a muscle if you must to stretch your hand out just a few millimeters beyond these universal and faceless pronouns...I don't know which cherished, famous poets you like, but if you go back and read them, they probably prefer concrete names and nouns and action verbs. Take autobiography as starting point and then drown your muse in the waters of image-ination.

Does that make sense?

That was a very beautiful moving poem, you are an excellent writer.

Very good. I have to say it hit a note with me even though I'm fairly certain we're haling from different situations.