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| Daniel 2005-05-10 ch 1, anon. | abuseWally, I'm far from being a "toy". Don't worry. I'm still you're friend even if Ruby isn't. Be nice! |
| LordK 2005-05-05 ch 1,  | abuseThis is clever; I like the rhymes. Nice simple, effective rhyme scheme, good metaphors. Looking critically, a few more devices or strengthening your metaphor "someone I used to know" might have improved this a little. But overall, I really liked it, especially the last stanza, very sweet. Yeah, nicely written definitely. |
| wally 2005-05-01 ch 1, anon. | abuseAdam Gwen another one of her 'toys' that she supposedly 'loved'. Daniel, don't get molested. |
| Daniel 2005-04-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseWho the hell is this guy? Not that I'm jealous... |