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Reviews For: The Sun and Moon

destinee's notebook 2008-06-12 ch 1,	abuse"And that's how lightening happens." Ha ha!
skylines 2006-05-29 ch 1,	abuseFunny :). Thanks much for not insulting Canada, though I do find it amusing to hear the sterio-types people make up about Canada. Igloos! Hahaha! I'm way off topic, and will probably drift farther, so excellent job! -Maggie
Eyetk 2005-10-01 ch 1,	abuseOh...my! Sorry, let me stop laughing here... Methinks that the sun just got PWNED! (Sorry, going through a gamer-phase again, which is part of the reason I've been in a rut and have taken so long to return your review...and apologies for that, too.) Oh, this was bloody excellent. Um...right! I'm supposed to find CCs, since that's what I do. Er...hmm. The dialogue/dialogue style is a bit odd, since it's also speckled with a few bits of non-dialogue here and there. Perhaps go a bit more either way (less non-dialogue, or more non-dialogue--and what I mean by that is actions/expressions that compliment the dialogue)? I won't give you my usual 'less dialogue!' rant, beacuse that clearly wouldn't fit this...meh. I love it. Cheers! - Eyetk
KaronePrincess 2005-09-26 ch 1,	abuseThat was SO FUNNY and HUMOR!SUN and MOON are so OPPOSITE! THIS IS REALLY INTERESTING SETUP!! REALLY! The conversations between the SUN and MOON made me LAUGHED...HARD... I really LOVE it. Plesae keep it up! Keep posting!
Infinite Abyss 2005-08-25 ch 1,	abuseThat was cute. Keep up the good work.
Clodhopper 2005-07-14 ch 1, anon.	abuseI agree with my cousin (Mack) that the beginning was kinda cute with the conversation, but wasn't entirely attention grabbing. The argument was hilarious; I especially like the end where you say, "And that's how lightening happens." One correction for you, though: it's lightning, no 'e'. Lightening is a pregnancy term. Anyhoo, this was very, VERY funny. I thank Mack for telling me about you. ~Ty
Clodhopper 2005-07-14 ch 1,	abuselol! this was awesome! i liked the start of it - a few small typos with ? and other punct u may wanna check out - but other than that it was great! At first i thought it was kinda ho-hum cute, aw the moon is talking to the sun...but then as they started arguing, it got funner. a little more responses from the sun would have been nice. who ever heard of moon bathing? the emphasis when they're saying "good night, good day" may wanna be checked. the moon doesnt emphasize "night" when theyre debating (dont know if its on purpose) and since they're arguing about night vs day "night" should probably be emphasized instead of "moon." just a small idea. and then, of course, there was the GREAT ending! good job there! that made me laugh. thank you for this read ~Mack
Cellar Door Mongrel 2005-06-19 ch 1,	abuseTHAT'S ADORABLE! I love this piece. You've officially made my favourites list. :-p
Cindy Moon 2005-04-25 ch 1,	abuseInteresting piece you have here, though I must say the language is a bit erhm, mature in that professional sense for a legend. Other than that, cute. Good attempt at humor. =]-Cindy Moon *)
Barefoot-Dreams 2005-04-16 ch 1,	abuseI loved this! It was so quirky and the premise was interesting right off the bat. I laughed out loud in a few spots, mostly the end.
swaggering curses 2005-04-14 ch 1,	abuseVery cute. I liked it. Especially the "mutant kangaroo" line. =)

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