I love how your summaries are almost exerpts from the poems.

I love your poetry.

Good poem. The first time I read through this, I considered it mediocre, but there's lines that jump out of this that make it great. Exp: remembered sin running through jaded veins. And, the last stanza is fantastic. The bulky/mediocre stuff that weighs it down is like the first stanza (until the line 'fruit perfume and brand name shampoo). Anyways, overall: great job.

I really like it! very nice imagery you used! Keep writing. :)

Oh, very nice. You've conjured some wonderful imagery in this piece. I love the way you talk about all the different senses. Smell is often overlooked but it is such a good way to leave a powerful impression in writing. I particularly like the “A laugh/Dark and husky/Sounds like/Remembered sin” bit. Wonderful, powerful and on the whole beautiful! Keep up the great work!

such imagery, great job!