I like your writing style very much, u cover up the meainig of ur poem with different words, and yet the reader can understand it^_^ Loved it!

Hey, this is a good one not very direct foward but i could really picture it. Nicely written. =)

I prefer the second formatting though they both work. Good poem too.

I could visualize this. Very nice.

COOL! pretty descriptive and stuff. Keep writing!

Woah, that painted a nice picture. o.o Good job.

Wow! What a fantastic poem! This is really cool! Write on!

~Anna~