Morbid indeed! I liked it! The drips changing to drops caught my attention. Constructive critisism... *thinks*... The second-to-last sentence seems to distract from the pattern because it's so long, but I can hardly condemn long sentences.

Morbid, indeed! But I agree; the style is just perfect for the idea. You did a great job turning a brief frame into a compelling description without sacrificing brevity. I find that really difficult.

Ehehe, this is really fascinating, I do say, old bean. Bwahahahahahahahahhahahahahahhahahahahhahahahahahahhahaha - I like the storyline. Tophole! But now I must fly.Cheerio! DO pardon my dementedness. I've had a rather nasty bout of it these days.