Wow, I must say that you are a very intense writer. The way you manipulate words was genius..in the first chapter/part. I only have one question. You seemed to have left out a few details in the second part that left me feeling a bit lost,was it done on purpose? I also noticed that you switched tenses frequently in the second part. Overall, Good job, I liked it

Quite intriguing...I couldn't stop reading (and it takes a lot to keep my attention). I'd love to read your other work.