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| Mime 2006-05-21 ch 1,  | abuseI like the imagery this poem paints--I see a lone candle struggling to stay lit as the darkness pressed down upon it. Well done! |
| Lady B.V Rose 2005-06-01 ch 1, | abuse*jumps for joy* why did I not see this sooner!? *pokes*I love it. Its so simple and vague, yet tells you so much. I can imagine the darkness shrinking back as the candle flickers. OK ramblings aside. Brilliant work. L:BVR |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-04-29 ch 1, | abuseSoft and ominous. |
| Miz E. Mak 2005-04-29 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful haiku. Good to see you back in the writing world. I've missed seeing you around every since Swords Edge died off... if you want, you can join my writing community. Just go to my profile and the link is there. Keep writing. I like your stuff a lot. |
| Frodo13 2005-04-27 ch 1, | abuseawesome haiku, wish I could write like you...keep it up! |
| Needa S 2005-04-24 ch 1, | abuseVery good. Excellent work. Keep'em coming. |
| Aquafied 2005-04-21 ch 1, | abusebeautiful, short and deep.i cant do that, but your just so awesome, you can. kudos to you. |
| simpleplan13 2005-04-21 ch 1, | abusewonderful.. tahnks for your review |
| obsidian katana 2005-04-20 ch 1, | abusebeautiful piece. simply written, and well conveyed. i like your use of personification. awesome job. keep writing! |
| Wasted Postage 2005-04-19 ch 1, | abuseOoh! I got chills from this. I can't really put my finger on an exact reason... it just did. I love the last line the best I think. It puts a lot of meaning into the haiku somehow. I'm so glad you have posted this for us! It has been a while. Excellent work! ~*~AbunaiChikara |
| poetic abortion 2005-04-19 ch 1, | abuseA very pretty haiku. Detailed in its own way, and really powerful in the way I interpit it. ^__^ I adore haikus, though restricted sometimes I find them a very nice way to spend a shot amount of boring time. XD A lovely way to but it, using a candel and the darkness. Though I was lost by the last line I quickly figured it out by reading it a second time. :P It really does fit. I really like it. Well done! !~* Noelle *~! |
| Knight of Tarian 2005-04-19 ch 1, | abuseHmm...tis a good hiaku. I like it. But I have a question about the third line. Is the darkness fearing the candle or the nighttime? *reads poem again* It looks like it's referring to the candle...my bad. But it'd be an interesting concept if the darkness feared nighttime. ~Knight |
| Getuie 2005-04-18 ch 1, | abuseThe image created by this haiku is really good. I'm not as keen on haiku in general (me brain is too small, I tink ;-P), but this one was clear. And carries another meaning for me as one of my friends often say "hope is like a candle". Well done. |
| Tori Keedah 2005-04-18 ch 1, | abuseOh wow. Another person I remember for '03! This piece is beautiful and completely positive (however dark it is). "The darkness fears it" Astonish ending! --indigo. |
| AlwaysAmberella 2005-04-18 ch 1, | abuseawesome awesome awesome, I love this, feel free to check out some of my stuff. I think you might like a few of them. Solo. |