I was rather amazed. There's a lot of powerful, lasting imagery in so few words. The disjointed, stuttered delivery gives a sense of dullness and repetition that enhances the feeling. It invoked a little of "The Wall" for me, as it shares the same bland surreality.

This is one of my favorite poems.

great poem! even though its short, i got a perfect image of the setting in my head just from reading your repitition. iron town sounds like a very cool setting for a fantasy story.

awesome. I feel like I live in Iron Town. I especially like the imagery of the dark and dankness.

great use of rhytmn in this poem - the way the first two lines were repeated in each stanza intriguing

Thought provoking... I like it.