Hm...it seems like some kind of conversation between two people..? I like it. x] And yeah, you probably won't get this review until the 20th. Darn me and my late-night-staying-up habits!
This is pretty good actually. The only comment I have is how you started it. "All right I will" I don't exactly get that. All right you will what? Just try making that a little clearer because that beginning seemed a little awkward. Great job!