Awesome job with this so far! My friend showed me your story and I fell in love with it. Keep up the great work. :)

It's not a bad plot, but the story seems a bit rushed. Lots of characters in a very short time and they all have a history. Try showing us Thalia and Silenious meeting, it'd help. Good luck with your story.

Wow, this is really good! UPdate soon, i'll be waitin!