Ahem. RoAR!

That was cool...I love that one. If my computer were hooked up to a printer, I would print this out and paste it in my locker...but it's not, so no scaring of school friends for me. Damn.

Luvs,K.S. Night

Wow,that is a poem i actually enjoyed reading, great work...

The end rhyme scheme was pretty cool, I liked how the last words of each stanza rhymed with those that came after. I also liked how you didn't waste a bunch of words in each stanza and made three lines single words - that brings out their meaning and emotions a lot better than rambling on about what they're supposed to mean. Very alternative. ^_^

oh wow! I love the way your wrote this!! It gives a feeling of what Hell is like, something I hope my friends and I or you never expirence... going in my favs.

Wow. The imagery reminds me of Dante's Inferno, without the medieval Italian crude humor. It's really powerful, and absolutely chilling. What is it, you ask? I'd call it a description of the human condition.

Wow, this is good, it's not "dumb and crappy" i find it intresting and unique

Wow...again...different. Very, very...unique.

Oh wow. I'm pretty sure you didn't do this intentionally but it's an amazing coinsidence. Ya know passover night is this Saturday, and one of the 'rituals' of the evening is to dip your finger in your glass of red wine and flick it onto your plate, reciting the ten plagues God supposedly rained down on Eygept(Dam, Tzfardea, Kinim...) Blood, Frogs, Lice, all that stuff. Well, anyway, it sounds JUST LIKE WHAT YOU WROTE HERE! Sort of like a personal reciting of the plagues of your(or someone's) mind. It's ** beautiful in that way and amazingly brilliant! How could you call this stupid?!!?

YAY! I AM THE FIRST TO REVIEW THIS!nice simplicity and imageryit is kind of like a journey through pain whcih ends in darknessfirst anger, then loneliness, then withdrawal, and hidden paini wonder very much about the last line"light burns scars upon my chest"- perhaps this means that the idea is to hide from the light because darkness is good/safe, or perhaps it is the whole thing about being in darkness too long, so the light hurts your eyesbut i think that it means healing hurts, hence the cyst. or perhaps the cyst is hidden in darkness(humour me while i deconstruct your poem! :)the only thing i will criticise is that all of your one word lines are verbs except for shy (until we reach the souls line) but i am not advising you to change it, of coursesorry about the surmises and deconstructionsi think the good thing about poems is that they are meant to be ambiguous, so the reader includes his/her own experiences into the poem to give it meaning...and i sound like an english textbook so i shall end this review here!