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| Kelpylion 2005-09-06 ch 1,  | abuseBeautifully-phrased musings. The word play was satisfying and well-executed, which it sometimes isn't (and then it's annoying).The message is oft-repeated, but you do it plenty of justice. |
| pneumothorax 2005-06-04 ch 1, | abuseThe first half of the second erse was wonderful. and 'your blood is as dark as mine--' Veyr, very readable. |
| tablesalt 2005-04-27 ch 1, | abuse"your blood as is as blue as mine; that is to say we're both quite red in the face, once we're done wasting our breath..." amazing. you've turned a single word into a beautiful picture. |
| Idris (again) 2005-04-24 ch 1, anon. | abuse**butterfly, sorry. You know how typos are. |
| Idris 2005-04-24 ch 1, anon. | abuse...You rock, love. Completely, utterly- this is so unbelievably lovely. It MORE-THAN satisfies. FEANOR!(!-sque-!) And Capetian kings! Ah, what beauty. You spoil me, truly. I especially loved the touch about 'butterly veins'; you know my weakness for _, haha. That bioethics class was certainly thought-provoking, ne? Consider me your eternal worshipper, Lin-DARLING. Bwahaha. I shall have your shrine set up by the time we get back from break =) |
| if sighing 2005-04-24 ch 1, | abuseWow, I'm trying to find something to say, but I can't get a single fragment out of my mind. Absolutely mind-blowing |
| twenty-second seduction 2005-04-24 ch 1, | abusei think i love this piece. |
| THROUGHTHESEEYES 2005-04-23 ch 1, | abuse"twisting helixes," another good way of putting it! Now that Prince Charles doesn't have to worry about marrying his country's allies...Just brought that to mind in remembering kings who married to seal countries allied friendships. Great Poem. |
| Cyssel 2005-04-23 ch 1, | abusehmm, interesting. i like the way you delivered it. last paragraph had the greatest impact, but the whole poem is wonderful. ^^" |
| Aslan Israel 2005-04-23 ch 1, | abuseHauntingly beautiful. just perfect. Brava. |
| crazy dog events 2005-04-21 ch 1, | abusevery very good. and i immediately liked you because you used the word carp-which has been a favorite of mine since age six. go you! i liked the second to last stanza best. good work. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-04-21 ch 1, | abuseExcellent, the analogies are add an air of historical beauty and the last stanza is greatly satisfying. |