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Perfectly Paradox 2008-05-03 ch 1,	abuseThe line "I seem to have lost God today" is such a strong image, like lost car keys or a favorite book. I also like the imagery of a virgin's first kiss, rouged and flushed compared to the sunset. Nice.
Marjorie Swann 2005-11-19 ch 1,	abuseThis poem is beautiful. It really is. It's wonderfully written, with amazing imagery. It's gorgeous. It's like looking into the eyes of someone you love with all your heart. It is beautiful. I haven't read very many things like this.
J.S. Lewis 2005-10-16 ch 1,	abuseWell, I'm 4 for 4 today for extremely positive reviews of people's work after this. Interesting how I go on sprees like this.Anyways, excellent, excellent piece. I love the way you formatted it, separating the last part from the rest of the poem."I seem to have lost God today..."Incredible line.
Theory Of The 4th Dimension 2005-09-11 ch 1,	abuseHm.I love this one, this struck me on more than one level.For me at least, this is one of your best. The imagery was cool too.
hoowdoideletethisaccount 2005-09-03 ch 1,	abuseI like this. It's innocent, and yet very thought-provoking. (Thought-provoking is, like, my favourite word ;P I love things that make me think.) The idea of feeling like we've "lost God" is one I can really relate to, as often it seems life, sin, and whatever else, come between Him and us, creating a distance that's unbearable--but it's never anything He has done, it isn't that He is going back on any promises, but simply that we are no longer resting in those promises. It requires some pretty major re-prioritizing, sometimes, and serious prayer for forgiveness.
Elizabeth Ebony 2005-09-01 ch 1,	abusewow.this is amazing,as you're reading it it almost seems ordinary but when you have finished you realise how truly beautiful it is.it is saddening but also uplifting in a strange way,I think it is your way of describing your own relationship with god that does that.keep it up.:) E.Ebony
Cloud Burst 2005-08-29 ch 1,	abusethats just so awesome - very pure and honest and sad. beautiful work!
Aslan Israel 2005-08-07 ch 1,	abusesky mimickeda virgin’s first kiss;rouged and flushed Brilliant imagery right there. Haven't seen something like that in a long time. Smashing ending, too. It's moce to rhyme every once in awhile.
The Melissa Occult 2005-08-05 ch 1,	abuseI just got crushed. One of the greatest friends I've ever had is gone. I tried to read your poem, to pay you back in some small way for the reviews you gave me. But the tear in my right eye, blurs half the screen, blurs the left side of my brain. I can pick out beautiful phrases but beauty means nothing if there is no love behind it. What am I saying, did I review or did I flame? It was a good work, Thank you for your reviews and your time, S.P.
Wesley Storm 2005-08-02 ch 1,	abuseBrilliant piece. I'd definately consider it as a poem and not a story. It has the flow of poetry (not as if poetry really has a specific 'flow'). I loved the way you set up the picture of the beach and really took the reader there before getting to the point of the piece. You're descriptions are georgeous, if I were to list them this review would probably just be a rephrase of the poem.
acrobia 2005-08-01 ch 1,	abuseAmaizing imagery! I loved the lines "The bright blue sky mimicked a virgin’s first kiss;" as well as "I seemm to have lost God today" - they are very deep and filled with feeling. I love the rymth of the poem, as well, and the way you have crafted it. Keep up the good work!xo - Acrobia
Lady E 2005-07-27 ch 1,	abusebeautiful! In those short phrases and with well-chosen words, you've painted the scenery so vividly. I particularly liked this one: "questions of an old man," even though it was a little boy whose eyes held all those searching questions. The last five lines are very powerful as well. It was interesting to see that it's "blind innocence" to not realize we don't have God. Very very well done, once again. And thanks so much for reviewing!
The Proxy Ninja 2005-07-24 ch 1,	abuseI thought of the "Footprints" poem after reading this. It emits a warm glow, even when it's sad. The imagery and descriptive language is top-notch. I really admire your writing, Brighteyes.
lackluster 2005-07-17 ch 1,	abuseperfect ending!! mesmerizingly beautiful poem. nicley done!
method acting 2005-07-08 ch 1,	abuseBeautiful.

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