Reviews for On the Pharaoh's Camel

Reviews For: On the Pharaoh's Camel - Reviews: Page 1 of 14

paradiie 2008-07-14 ch 15,	abusei seriously love this story. and i can't wait for the next one to come out.
the kitten 2008-03-24 ch 15,	abuseyou have to finish this! I want to know how it ends! think about your fans, all the poor people waiting for the next chapter...
nikki 2008-03-04 ch 15, anon.	abuseupdate please! finish it for me! please!!
Lucy Grace 2007-06-24 ch 15,	abusePlease finish this story? Submit it to your new account or whatever but please finish it!! It's fab.
Gewher 2007-06-03 ch 15,	abuseUrm, hello? -waves frantically- Are you still alive? If you are, and you find yourself with half a heart, you'd continue this story. Just for me? Please?! It's awesome, and well, I absolutely love Kaarik, as in the sarcastic goat herder, I kind of miss the old him, now that he's become pharoah he seems to have lost his amazing personality. I say that he and Ellianne run away together, into the desert with nothing but goats, dogs, and each other to keep them company. That would be awesome, hey! Amseth could become pharoah! hehe, so much for an heir but he'd make a good leader! It's really sad what happened to him when he was younger, man I really feel bad for those little slave boys! It'd be like having Michael Jackson as an owner! Anyway, you really must keep up the good work! PS: I like how you've not put explicit sex in this, especially since most people seem to think that to have gay people in a story, there must be sex between them. I find this highly annoying as that is not what relationships, between either gay or straight, should be about. I mean it is a part of it all, but it's not the only thing. You've done a good job conveying this, and I really like it!
awestruck4 2007-04-22 ch 15,	abusewow! I like this story the best out of all your other ones :) It's definitely addicting for me since I can't seem to stop myself hehe anyhow, one of the strengths of your story is your plot-it continues to heighten & become more intriguing. I also really am enamored with the characters you've developed. However, you might want to consider revising because some sentences are illogical where you wrote one character's name but meant another. All in all, keep up your very original, well-spun story! I eagerly anticipate your next update !
FrenzyFan78 2006-12-14 ch 15,	abuseOkay. I really like your story, but there's a few things that I think would make it better. For one, I've noticed a lot of inconsistancies in names and descriptions. I know you spelled Marcus "Markus" a few times, and once said that Leon had golden eyes instead of gray. Little things like that that could easily be fixed by some editing. Another thing is that I find some things that happen quite unrealistic, like Ramses leaving to go find Ellianne. Realistically, he probably wouldn't be able to because the people of Egypt would stop trusting him, especially since he was in hiding for so long, and they'd start looking for someone to replace him. Unless that's still coming. I don't know, it's something to think about. I do like how you pay attention to a lot of your characters instead of simply focusing on Ellianne and Ramses, which seems to be a problem with a lot of romantic stories. I also enjoy how you don't spend excessive amounts of time describing things that aren't necessary to hear about, like clothing. You give good enough descriptions so the reader can imagine what you're imagining, but don't over-do it. Good job. Anyway, you should think about updating again sometime soon. Since it's been awhile. -FrenzyFan78 P.S. - What does the title of the story have to do with the story? I don't recall there ever being a camel...
izzy-bh 2006-12-11 ch 1,	abusehey It's been a while since an update. I stumbled across your author account and have read 2 of your completed stories. THey're fantastic! I'm not sure whether you've given up but just dropping a review to let you know that you have an eager reader waiting! Izzy xx
cherryblossom88 2006-11-07 ch 1,	abuseWow! This story is awesome! Im hooked! Please update as soon as possible!
crystal 2006-09-26 ch 15, anon.	abuseplease... update... you are so killing me...
serenitylovegod 2006-09-12 ch 15,	abuseoh my god I absoulutely love the story. I just read all 15 chapters today and I was captivated. I cannot wait for the next chapter.
Forget-The-Sorrow 2006-09-08 ch 15,	abuseInteresting story, please continue writing!
Michelle Habibi 2006-07-29 ch 15,	abuseomy God!! all this suspense is killing me! when are you going to update?? please let it be son! -Michele Habibi
Michelle Habibi 2006-07-29 ch 1,	abusevery good! hope u update soon! -Michelle Habibi
LOSTxINSIDExMYxDREAMS 2006-05-23 ch 15,	abuseGah...update!?! This story is the best but it's already been 4 months since you've updated?! I'm gonna start pulling my hair out soon. This story is VERY well written. Your writting style is enjoyable to read...etc..!

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