You're 13? This is absolutely amazing. It's going on my favorites list. The ideas are varied, the language is origional - this is top notch, mate!

wow. I absolutely love the stuff about the fingers... original and a little off-kilter while still making sense. I like how you never actually use the word "piano" and yet you describe it so perfectly that there is no way a reader can miss it. your writing is riddled with a subtlety few poets can employ effectively. keep writing!

i would go, 'hah, sucker! i remembered to review!' or something along those lines, but i figured it'd be somewhat redundant since the very presence of this review speaks for itself. so.

now that i've filled half the box with my rather embarassing inanity, my half-assed crit is kind of redeemed. or something. uh, i like the tone in your poem, your line breaks are good and yeah, i think i like this best out of your other works.

p.s. sorry. i'm too lazy to think of something remotely constructive.

This is rich in culture and spiritual meanderings.

this is beautiful.I read some of your earlier poems and you've improved so so so much. Great work!

ps: are you in CAP?

manuel fajar: true, Steinways are capable of making beautiful tinkling sounds. but a piano's music is only as beautiful as the pianist's skills. and you'd begin to wonder why you paid so much for a Steinway concert grand once the notes start to yellow if you've proved yourself too incompetent for the Mozart-rated keyboard.

Very interesting perspective—life in a hawk's body with skyscraper window eyes—or, as Paul Erdos would say, "My mind is open!" Do you think Steinways are overpriced? They do have a beautiful sound. m

Wow. That was lovely, that was grand. I need to read more of your stuff. I have an insatiable desire to after this.

Ah, beautiful. Particularly enjoyed the last stanza. Ha yes, Chinese is worth angsting over too. And maybe physics.

i liek all teh metaphors.. great job & thanks for your review

i really like the steinway part. haha all about the pope and stuff, haha Vatican sounds appropriate.

love love love the individual stanzas, but I still don't get the flow. great job with the enjambement and choice of words though.

This poem is beyond your years...the depth is unbelievable.

lazy to login. OMG, LIKE I READ THE FIRST LINE AND bang. i'm in love with this. (: i like the imagery, really. dusty and serious in a light way >< good job.

who are you trying to be; it's good stuff but it's not you i should think. -kismet.