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| gold against the soul 2005-06-17 ch 1,  | abuseYou're 13? This is absolutely amazing. It's going on my favorites list. The ideas are varied, the language is origional - this is top notch, mate! |
| beti213 2005-06-14 ch 1, | abusewow. I absolutely love the stuff about the fingers... original and a little off-kilter while still making sense. I like how you never actually use the word "piano" and yet you describe it so perfectly that there is no way a reader can miss it. your writing is riddled with a subtlety few poets can employ effectively. keep writing! |
| cheeseworth 2005-06-08 ch 1, | abusei would go, 'hah, sucker! i remembered to review!' or something along those lines, but i figured it'd be somewhat redundant since the very presence of this review speaks for itself. so. now that i've filled half the box with my rather embarassing inanity, my half-assed crit is kind of redeemed. or something. uh, i like the tone in your poem, your line breaks are good and yeah, i think i like this best out of your other works. p.s. sorry. i'm too lazy to think of something remotely constructive. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-05-23 ch 1, | abuseThis is rich in culture and spiritual meanderings. |
| laundryshapedsouls 2005-05-15 ch 1, | abusethis is beautiful.I read some of your earlier poems and you've improved so so so much. Great work! ps: are you in CAP? |
| Cyssel 2005-05-09 ch 1, | abusemanuel fajar: true, Steinways are capable of making beautiful tinkling sounds. but a piano's music is only as beautiful as the pianist's skills. and you'd begin to wonder why you paid so much for a Steinway concert grand once the notes start to yellow if you've proved yourself too incompetent for the Mozart-rated keyboard. |
| Manuel Fajar 2005-05-02 ch 1, | abuseVery interesting perspective—life in a hawk's body with skyscraper window eyes—or, as Paul Erdos would say, "My mind is open!" Do you think Steinways are overpriced? They do have a beautiful sound. m |
| wordsworth in a garbage can 2005-05-01 ch 1, | abuseWow. That was lovely, that was grand. I need to read more of your stuff. I have an insatiable desire to after this. |
| tablesalt 2005-04-27 ch 1, | abuseAh, beautiful. Particularly enjoyed the last stanza. Ha yes, Chinese is worth angsting over too. And maybe physics. |
| simpleplan13 2005-04-24 ch 1, | abusei liek all teh metaphors.. great job & thanks for your review |
| magicbubble 2005-04-24 ch 1, | abusei really like the steinway part. haha all about the pope and stuff, haha Vatican sounds appropriate. |
| Ohmm 2005-04-24 ch 1, | abuselove love love the individual stanzas, but I still don't get the flow. great job with the enjambement and choice of words though. |
| catseyeview 2005-04-23 ch 1, | abuseThis poem is beyond your years...the depth is unbelievable. |
| naomi 2005-04-23 ch 1, anon. | abuselazy to login. OMG, LIKE I READ THE FIRST LINE AND bang. i'm in love with this. (: i like the imagery, really. dusty and serious in a light way >< good job. |
| negligible fictional force 2005-04-23 ch 1, | abusewho are you trying to be; it's good stuff but it's not you i should think. -kismet. |