That was very interesting and well wriiten, but I had slight trouble understanding parts of it. Did the mermaid die? Good nontheless.

I've-seen-the-fairies (and I have to!)

Yo.I think I get the parenthetical italics, but other than that, it reminds me of this other fiction I read which reminded me of a slash fanfic generator: so randomized and nonsensical that it was both musical and (potentially) profound. Whatever the case, you exhibit sound grammar and that's all that matters. Cheers!