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| Blutiger Tod 2007-07-21 ch 18,  | abuseAh, I finally review (and read...). I certainly see I'm not the only one neglecting updates. -sigh- Ahem, anyway... I'm glad to see Nathan and Samuel finally got together (somewhat, at least), and I'm glad to know the plot will be developing much more...obviously(?) now. By the way, you may want to work on your tenses for your English; you'll often use multiple tenses in one sentence, or even throughout a written work, which serves to confuse the reader. Aside from that, your English is very good (at least written, I've never heard you speak). |
| Zakuyoe 2007-01-17 ch 17, | abuseI meant updated... not reviewed... But anyway, I definitely decided to read this again, haha. An interesting read, though I had to find a chapter that I hadn't reviewed yet. Some reason, I don't remember reading chapter 17 or 18, yet I reviewed on 18... so I'm here to say... YAY! Excellent read. And it's quite frustrating that Oliver hasn't been physically present in a while, as I kinda do like him a lot. Argh. But this is definitely a good break. I've been writing this new story (which'll eventually be really long, but right now I've only got five chapters up), and it's so frustrating that I haven't gotten any reviews for it yet. I dunno if it just plain sucks or what, but for some reason I'm just... continuing to write it, hoping that someone'll review it one day. Reading this definitely inspires me to keep going though, as odd as that might sound to you; I really like this story because it's... well, I think I've said it before, a lot like my own life, in a way. This is REALY LONG! I'll leave you alone now, haha. Good luck writing! ~zak |
| merrymowmow 2006-12-10 ch 18, | abuseI was wondering when you're going to update. |
| Kilian 2006-11-09 ch 18, | abuseSalut, sais pas si j'ai laissé une review avec l'autre compte, mais je me suis dit que j'allais en laisser une aussi avec celui-ci. Alors bravo pour ton nouveau chapitre et bonne chance pour la suite :) |
| Rachizzle 2006-11-01 ch 18, | abuse;_; this chapter was super super awesome, but where the hell is Oliver!? lmao... I miss him, I barely even remember him at all! |
| Marlyse 2006-11-01 ch 18, | abuseTien tien, Sam aurait-il fini par apprendre une ou deux choses ? Si tu dis que Anita va être contante, je te crois. Par contre il me semble que colin perd de plus en plus son petit côté je vois le monde à travers un kaléidoscope. Avant il faisait plus de commentaires pendant sa narration il me semble. Mais peut-être que non. En tout cas J'ai hâte de voir revenir Oliver. |
| UnOriginal 2006-10-31 ch 18, | abuselol way to go Samuel and Nathan ... aw poOr Colin i sure Oliver so somewhere out there lol plz update =] |
| just-another-slash-fan101 2006-10-31 ch 18, | abuseOMFG! *does dances around the computer!* Sweet Deal! Halloween and then this updating... I'm in heaven!... I must have dies somewhere along the line. okokok. I'm good! Lol. Very funny chapter! Lol. I had me laughing most of the time! I can't wait for the next chapter to come! Patiently awaiting, Miss Shawna Shoe |
| Zakuyoe 2006-10-31 ch 18, | abuseomgz. you finally reviewed! I'm so excited. You definitely need to update more. ^__^ |
| Marlyse 2006-08-31 ch 17, | abuseouai! un nouveau chapitre. J'imagine déjà ce que va prendre Nathan quand Sam va se réveiller (à moins qu'il en oublie son aversion du sex, on ne sait jamais). Quand à Collin… je ne le pensais pas aussi tordu. Mais bon, c'est un pauvre petit avec les hormones en ébulitions, mettons qu'on lui pardonne. Mais il devrait faire quelque chose pour Samuel quand même. Après tout ils sont ami et il connaît son avi sur la question. J'éspère qu'Anita aprécie tout ce qu'on fait pour elle (et qu'elle ne tombera pas sur une des photo après coup, petit fils ou pas elle serait capable d'en faire un poster). |
| Blutiger Tod 2006-08-16 ch 17, | abuseOh, you evil little French girl: you leave us hanging yet again! I liked the chapter, though.As for my story: no, I have not given up on it. I just had writer's block for a year! But my inspiration has returned and I started on the third chapter.Anyway, please update soon (and if you have writer's block like I did, I hope something will happen to clear it away)! |
| Bedlam Chaos 2006-08-09 ch 17, | abuseYep, je suis toujours la pour te lire... Meme en etant de l'autre cote de la planete avec un clavier qwerty et n'ayant qu'une demi-heure par jour pour aller sur internet. Serieux... C'est excellent. Pour ce qui est du point de vue... Ne change pas mais s'il te plait... Ne laisse pas Colin tout seul, c'est trop cruel. Enfin... Du moment que tu n'arretes pas cette scene trop brutalement tout va bien... Ah! A force de parler japonais j'en perds mon francais v_v. C'est frustrant, je parle un melange de trois langues ces temps-ci v_v. Donc... Dans cette situation, je dirais que Nathan est juste merveilleux et j'aimerais beaucoup que le vice l'emporte sur la vertu. I hope you will give us the next chapter to read soon. (et je me fiche de l'ordre dans lequel j'ecris cette phrase en japonais du moment que tu mets le verbe a la fin, cela n'a pas d'importance ;) ) Babaille ;) |
| UnOriginal 2006-08-09 ch 17, | abuseOMG you have to finish it plz wah poOr Samuel lol ... |
| Rachizzle 2006-08-09 ch 17, anon. | abuseSIGH. of course I didn't give up on it, dear.. it's still one of the bests I've read ^_^ I can't wait for the next chapter, but changing POV at this point i just not a good idea for me. Colin has grown to be, like, the best narrator ever. Lol! I hate how you left this on a cliff.. but.. eh, I'll live. :P Update soon please! |
| chibicherrychan 2006-08-08 ch 17, | abuseOh my (insert swear word) God! You updated! Tell you the truth, it was well worth the wait. I really enjoyed reading this chapter. I especially liked the part where Colin attempts to make Sam snap out of it using his calm and methodical mind and whatnot; it was quite a funny bit. Oh, and I still adore Nathan and his perverted ways; 'that's right my man, he says take off your shirt, you ain't got a shirt to take off so you take everything else off instead!' Okay, so it's a little creepy he would go and try to 'sexually awake' Sam while he's out cold; I mean, he could be arrested for sexual abuse, but somehow your story makes me want to shrug and go 'eh, why not'. Yeah, it was really entertaining, so thanks for updating. I'm also pretty happy to say that I hadn't forgotten what was happening in your story (I tend to forget quickly) so I was able to just follow as if there hadn't been such a long wait between the last two chapters. Oh, I was forgetting! I think it would be nice to get Sam's point of view in the next chapter. Now, allow me to do a little victory dance over having figured out your nationality. So now, you try to guess mine! Come on, where am I from? Sorry, I'm being silly again... happens a lot... And it's not like it's actually easy to tell from written stuff, is it.I'll give you a hint: tu détestes fort probablement mon accent. Maybe not but it's generally the case... So? So? Can you guess? Silliness set aside, this was a great chapter! Hope you've already got inspiration for the next one 'cause I'm waiting, and patience isn't one of my strong suits. :) Cheers! |