The song that Alethen sang...but it's really depressing, but then depressing=beautiful! Well...not all the time, since the way your write is always beautiful. haha... That was incredibly cheesy, but it is because everything just flows really well together.

Hey!! You updated and it's really good! It took sort of a long time to get into it, but that's only 'cause nothing made any sense...I got confused so many times. I really should read the prequels... Anyways, as I was reading it, I realized that your story's events were playing a movie in my mind.

Rather big changes actually when it comes to the earlier chapters.

Cal seems back to staying on his 'mystical' planemaster role again, yet still affecting those around him.

The story is definitely put in a way that it's a little easier to understand the flow of the plot, but I believe it keeps jumping back and forth from the past to the present, sort of 'confusing' things a bit. Still, it does give us a better look at the background.

I notice too that the half blood in the first section of the chapter isn't named, hmm...

The Heritage is still a great mystery though...

Your details are amazing, and, as always, your wording is perfect, as is the story's pace.

I like the Latin words that you put in for spells because it means that you actually care for your story. People find it so surprising that we give so much effort in writing stories.

Sorry that I hadn't reviewed sooner, but you have a beautifully detailed and engrossing story overall!

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A very interesting opening. Some of the paragraphs could have been broken up in places, just so they wouldn't be too long, but otherwise you have dazzling description. it really gave me a picture of what was going on. Good job with that; it made the opening chapter really intriguing.

just wondering, but are the spell things in Latin or something, or are they your own creation? I've always been interested in languages, but I don't take latin. I recognized some of the roots- like in terrenus "terra" or something means earth. Well whatever you used to make them up, it sounded pretty cool.

Good job on the first chapter. I will be back when I have more time (homework calls).

I knew this day would come, and I look upon it with pride and awe. Your skill has surpassed my own, and I can only cheer you on for you are merely awakening and have so long to only get better and better.

The details of battle as as clear, exciting and gripping as that of an action movie, perhaps of an animated movie I watched many months ago. Detail and violence compliment the action like colors to a canvas - they fit right in.

Your new signature to apply what I must guess to be latin spells is quite genuine and creative. I could never have thought of something like that, and it gives this chapter and fiction a liveliness and sense of devotion. Clearly you have thought long on this fiction.

We know Impi's personality at last, yet perhaps I was mistakenly overlooking the fiction in my eagerness... what was the Healer Magister's name? As always, something like this makes me curious, as due to my nature.

... I bow down to your now superior skills, and thank the greater powers for investing such talent that has not gone wasted in you. I will read more in time.

Another chaper, another well done piece of work.

One thing you like to do is reveal parts of the story at a time and let us piece it together. However, it's done in a way that it's not very obvious where the pieces go.That's the sense of 'mystery', so to say.

What I believe is that the scenes in ch2 with Calcifer are the past, followed by the wars in ch1 - start of ch2.

Ch3 however, may be more in the future, where things have calmed down and flow in peace.

Then, with Raidan unknowlingly discovering an ancient artefact. Part of the Herritage perhaps?But what Calcifer left behind were his notes, didn't he? It still eludes me as to what exactly is the Heritage.

Both the poetic sequence and the condluding line are fascinating too...

I am confused. o_O...

did Calcifer shift back in time or something? 'Cos the opening scene seems to herald the end of the Ascendant dragons; the middle where Cal appears is near that time as well; but the ending is before..?

Why doesn't Calcifer speak though? I'm sure they would've loved his voice... also his adopted parents would really miss him wouldn't they?

o_o...*read again*dramatic twists and turns still unchanged.O_O...!!

Poor Impi! Having to shoulder all that responsibility...But the story is very very good. Did you think that perhaps it might be able to stand as a one-shot? Maybe tweak the ending a little so that the bad guy is permanently dead!! >D *evil grin*

Hmm...the tale of a time long ago, followed the the scenes of a mysterious dragon. Knowing you, I'd have to ask...which one comes first?

Another nice piece of work! Not always easy to understand, but even throwing us into the middle of a battle like that...I'm able to get the picture...somewhat...

Quite descriptive, and interesting. A little confusing in some parts, but that may be just me. Good work!