 sylvia's syndrome 2005-04-24 . chapter 1Well, the image you create with this is certainty vivid. But I’m not sure what this was intended to be. It’s not in the traditional format for haiku (5/7/5) or tanka (5/7/5/7/7). But, glancing at some of your other work, the poems you have place in the haiku section don’t fit the format either, so perhaps this is a style of haiku I’m not familiar with. That’s certainly possible. Anyway, good job with the imagery. Keep writing! |