Amazing description. Very emotive. I hope you decide to continue this.

Oh hunny, it's hard to know what to say, when this feels so personal.

It's an excellent piece, your dialouge is so powerful, and the ending is incredible. It's so tense and full of emotion. I feel so much for the narrator. It's a really striking, intelligent piece.

Such pain and emotion displayed here. Wonderful piece of work. I hope this is the prologue for an even longer story because I want to see the ened of this.

Wow... that was very moving, very nicely written. descriptions were good, but i don't think that you could stand up to a multiple-person deialogue in your writing, because you have to say who's talking, you know, he said, she said, i said, they said... etc. Anyway, very well done, i agree with the woman... lol ^_~

~Max W.~