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| weirdchild 2005-04-27 ch 1,  | abuseVery, very well written. I like how the reader isn't really sure about what happened in your past, and therefore makes the reader curious. It could be a great story. WC. |
| Rose of Darkness 666 2005-04-27 ch 1, | abuseIt started out really strong, and then it just sort of...ended. I'd advise adding a bit more to it to get the message across more? It's got some good stuff but it could stand to be developed more. Overall nice work. |