hm...i'm going to offer a bit of constructive critism on this one. I don't think you quite captured the feeling of a parent here. In fact, if you hadn't said so in the review or in the story, I don't think a person would have actually believed that it was their parent. You did a great job on explaining the situation, and the metaphors, etc. are all very well thought out, but...if I was a parent and I had just lost my child, I wouldn't have time to think this stuff. I wouldn't have time to be happy--my child had just died, the one that I had spent 9 months in pain for, and the one that I had cried and broke my back for millions of times, though they didn't realize it. I have 8 nieces and am the second youngest of 10 (though most ppl don't believe it). Just try to think about what your mom would think if they suddenly lost a child, you.

I'm just scrolling down the list of stories here, lol. I'm in a lot of pain today, so the easiest thing for me to do is just sit here and read! Good stuff. Loved the story though, really, I did. Like I said before, with the different types of stories, you change your style. This one has a faint change from the other one that I mentiond that in, but I still love the way you write. Cya! wow this is long... and btw, all the stories i'm adding to my list. Maybe someone else will read them!