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| Tii Jay 2005-05-31 ch 2,   | Very nice... I like this story a lot. But are any of the main characters ever going to meet? Well, update soon! -tii jay |
| Unreal Vibration 2005-04-30 ch 1, | You know, as if by some drop of Fate, I happened to stumble across this story. Quite funny when you take under consideration that I only browse this site whenever my boredom gets the best of me.But, either way, onto the story. You're off to a pretty good start; though I was a bit confused at the beginning with the time-jump (I'm going to take it that the halfdemon is just older than the other three characters - whom I'm assuming were born around the same time). Your somewhat distinct writing style gives this story a VERY goo flare; though your words simple, your wordplay is beautiful (I actually felt the fear and disbelief myself when Suneshi's travel companion was beheaded. Hell, I had to read that line alone several times just to make sure I was reading it correctly - VERY GOOD!). While still only the introduction (and probably in their pasts), you give us all a nice feel for the characters (and I'm pretty sure that'll, if nothing else, you'll develop three great personas off those events alone). And, of course, the 'political incorrectness' or notions we'd think were wrong that have been instilled in your characters will, without a doubt, make for even more beautiful character development and conflict. Lastly, I'd like to note that you've done a good job of incorporating some underlying themes in but a few words (whether you notice it or not). The fact that you're consistent with it shows that you actually thought this through and are a good author. I look forward to more from you (as such, I've added you to my Author Alert List, Favorite Authors List, and the story to my Favorite Stories List. And, as far as I know, it is one of but a few. So, be happy =P). Though I'm sure you aren't, don't be afraid to take this story places you may have never even seen. Goodbye and good luck. Remember: Beauty is made by suppression and growth with wholeness in scope. Sound out~ Unreal Vibration |