This was great!

Loved your story! I would love to read a story about Daniel...or a sequel to I'm the Nanny...

Great Job!

this was really good...it kinda helped that i played soccer and understood what was happening

Yes, that's very true... brothers usually don't want to french you. This story is really, really sweet. I love it!

Hey cool.

Great quick read. I really liked the characters. I liked how they were all protective of her.

haha that was class. hilarious really

I really, really, really loved the ending. it really made me smile. Very, very cute. wonderfully written.

Keep Writing,

xxTunstall Chickxx

Nice. It was so sweet. I wish i was surrounded by hot guys that want to french me. There is a daniel guy at my school ut when I tried flirting with him I got totally rejected. Geesh. Anyways it was as I said SWET!1

Aww this was a really well written adorable story! Good Job1

OMG! Such a great chapter! I loved the last scene especially. Your sense of humor is so contagious, I found myself laughing out loud! You gotta update soon! I need another fix!

Haha, I love this story. It maybe needs some grammatical/spelling editing, but you write well and the story's strong. Cute :).

hey! this story has a great premise and a great plot. however, i don't think it's developed enough. i would consider taking it down and making it longer so you can get some more character developement in there as well as developing Max and Jenny's relationship. everything moves pretty quickly and i don't really get a feel for your characters as real people. but you do have what to work with. so good luck in the future! you have a lot of talent.

awesome! i wish i had that! but no it is way to fictional to become real! well for me anyway!lol

really? a story about daniel? i love max i mean love! ok so i hope that hes a sexy man... wait that made no sense whats so ever! anyways loved the chapter!