 Shima And Tempis 2005-09-24 . chapter 1Eerily disturbing and yet I enjoyed reading. Favorite lines being:
"Slowly from the distance,The sun begins to rise.It shines upon the pools of blood.What will be tomorrow's prize?"
And...
"Midnight shadows dancing aroundFlickering golden flames.A single whisper said aloud:'Here begins the games.'"
Hehe, the beginning and end. Really, really well done.-SAT |
 celentia-changingacconts 2005-05-16 . chapter 1kinda creepy, but i like it! good discription. |
 Pelirizado 2005-05-11 . chapter 1Whoah! Great job getting the story across! The few details allow the reader's imagination to work. It is a little dark, but very intriguing. Good job. |
 Stifled Scar 2005-05-05 . chapter 1that was really good. you had great use of imagery |
 leslumaru 2005-05-01 . chapter 1morbid, creepy, somewhat gross and disturbing...i love it! |
 Cry Tears of Darkness 2005-05-01 . chapter 1i like it even if the rhythm is a tad off, i mean u read my poem it was completey off the rhythm. wtv works for you and makes it ur own is awesome. no law says there has to have rhythm or rhyme. i like this piece, very descriptive and well done |