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| Love Eternally 2006-03-22 ch 1,   | that was cute. |
| Esquirella 2005-05-02 ch 1, | Very cute! |
| Delure Gelloc 2005-05-01 ch 1, | Aww. How cute. I liked your story! It made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. And most everyone in the story was gay! O_O Yay! I was surprised. It's like a big happy gay town! ^_^ And so much DDR! You must enjoy playing DDR... (I prefer Pump myself... ^o^/) What you could do to make the story better is to give a little more detail about the characters. At times I felt a little overwhelmed at the amount of people you introduced to actaully keep up with remembering the names. Other times it seems as though you were rushing through it, giving the reader only dialogue snippits at times to base teh entire scene from. Other than that, I think this is a good story, and I'm glad you finished it (with a happy ending, no less!) |