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| Nagutai 2006-08-28 ch 1,  | abuseNice story... Plus, this is the guy you met at astronomy at Lost Vally... I am in the middle of moving... I will submit my first story soon. |
| bdavis 2006-05-05 ch 5, anon. | abuseOK--you got me on cockatrice?! Do I have to find a dictionary (a real one?)! Mrs. D. |
| Fabala, of Crest Hills 2006-02-12 ch 5, | abusehttp://w.youtube.com/?v=bgRZoLHTayU this is a song from Wicked with a final fanasty twist! enjoy! |
| Fabala, of Crest Hills 2006-02-04 ch 1, | abuseHey, this is great! I'm so forcing you to send it in, so is Mrs. Bailey(idon'tquote). You've definitly got skills! love, M.F. |
| bdavis 2006-01-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseDanny--great job! Keep writing! I enjoy your poetry, too--have you thought of incorporating a little poetry into your prose? I think it would be interesting! Mrs. D. |
| Lunar-ninja 2006-01-14 ch 5, | abuseThose are some pretty dang flimsy mages, my friend. Dang flimsy. Cockatrice?! Now we know who's been playing too much ToS! HAH! Your obsession with ninjas is pretty darn evident. ...I will never understand your way of making words into some gibberish. (waves off the unpronounceable words and walks away) Oh RAINBOU, where ARE you? I've got a cockatrice over here who wants a frying... Ashite Imasu,LN |
| LN 2005-12-18 ch 1, anon. | abuseYo, Seth, just wanted to let you know that the link to your web site doesn't work. Merry Christmas!LN |
| Lunar-ninja 2005-12-09 ch 4, anon. | abuse(grumbles to self) I swear, if you ever update this chapter like you did now, I will personally string you up in town square for all to see. I mean, I have to submit an ANONYMOUS review! (growls and stalks off to vent her anger on the hapless Iwansi) (scurries back) (sigh) I haven't even read the darn thing yet. I'd blast you too if I had magic powers. And although I don't, I know of somebody who does...(goes out the door and returns with her...ahem, TRUSTY friend Kiyo) Blow that sucker away, Kiyo me boy!Kiyo: (sigh) "Another pompous fool...I hate doing your battles for you, LN."Yes, yes, we know that, now get to frying and icing him with that wind magic of yours! (grins) Make sense of THIS, you silly language maker!Zygob ai a seiye natie. (sniggers) Oh, you sly old dog...You are making this far too similar to a certain book! (wink) Gybun sounds like a name for somebody's butt cheek. SHADE! (growls) Man alive...(grumbles to self again) Light from the inside of an egg. NOW I've seen everything. Eh, sorry if I seem a bit too critical today, but it's 9:51 at night and I stink and need a shower. So, toodles. Ashite Imasu,LN |
| Definitely not Alan 2005-11-03 ch 4, anon. | abuseLooking pretty good danny boy... |
| Lunar-ninja 2005-09-29 ch 4, | abuseHmph. Jerk. Do they LOOK like mages to you, idiot? I swear, one more of them, and you're going to MY dragons on Haradris!Yulakai: "But humans taste nasty."Okay, so roast him over a fire SLOWLY and-Yulakai: "And there's no way these calws can turn a spit."Quit bursting my bubble! (growl) Anyway, good job, Arabian Shag Rug. Ashite Imasu,LN |
| Hipamaboborkanicorbabbletom... 2005-07-18 ch 3, anon. | abuse"Seth" its your good friend Hipamaboborkanicorbabbletometherneks or David for short. (I was just getting into the story.)On the last chapter near the bottom is a long long paragraph near the middle you spelled where wrong. You spelled it as were and since I know you care about such things as that i thought you should know |
| Lunar-ninja 2005-07-16 ch 3, anon. | abuse(giggles insanely) Eh, pardon me, sir, but a drought is the absence of water. I believe you're looking for draught. Heheh...stupid spell checker never picks the darn stuff up. Hey, that was a setup, you grimy old barracks master...uh, thingie! (shakes her fist) What I'd give for a nice fat frying pan with which to whack him! (mutters) Aiyehseiey...That's elven for airhead, if you're lost. (falls over) Might I suggest parting them monster paragraphs? It makes them so much harder to yeseiaey if they're...whoops, slipped elvish again...argh. Sorry, that odd word is read. Well, hardee har, you idiot of a barracks master. (boots him in the rear) I don't like you proud, cocky types any more than I like broccoli. (kicks him again for good measure) You be nice, mister, or heaven help you when nine dragons are after your pelt. (laughs maniacally as Mr. Barracks rubs his butt) Good chapter, Danno - Erm, I MEAN Seth... LN P.S. Oh, I might as well tell you if you're interested. Should you feel compelled to read Dragon Moon, it's on fanfiction.net. Just go to search, type in my username (the moniker in the name box) and bingo, you have it! Keep a-writing, Danno! |
| Lunar-ninja 2005-07-16 ch 2, anon. | abuse(grins evilly) Well, DAN, I ust checked back to see if you had updated this story, and good golly, I found an extended chapter! Been workin' hard, eh Dan? Oh, whoops. You need to protect your real identity with your alias! (whispers) Good job, Danny boy - er, I mean SETH. I'm off to read the next chapter. Oh, and just so you know, you're not the only one with a slew of strange creatures, odd languages and a wierd planet up your sleeve. Yes, I made up my own elvish language. Pretty nerdy, huh? I believe (if you know where to find the bloody fanfic) it starts on chapter 4 of Dragon Moon. What are you glaring at me for? Oh, I see. Duh. Right. Next chapter. I'm going. Now. LN |
| The Postscript 2005-05-30 ch 1, | abusethank you for the review, and sorry it took so long to reply...i was on a trip. anyway...to get the cross on my profile i went to microsoft word under the symbols and inserted a cross onto the a blank document, then i selected it to copy and paste it into the area where you write your profile. while i'm thinking about it...do you have any idea how to get poems to not be double spaced? and finally, i don't know too much about fantasy writing so i don't have much creditability to review this, but i like the descriptions you include, and it's all very clear writing. keep writing, and God Bless! |
| Seth Greenwood 2005-05-21 ch 2, | abuseOk, checkers of reviews, review this! I love reviews and i need feedback as for what to change, what not to change...etc. Now stop reading and start typing (please). |