Beautiful language, both english and spanish. I think the spanish lines really give the poem feeling...they help underscore the picture you seem to be trying to paint.

I like the poem. It seems very fluid through the change of languages. The only criticism I have is that on the second line on the second phase from the end I beleive you translated the Spanish words into English, which seems to contrst the rest of the poem where each of the phrases was seperate rather than a translation. But I could be mistaken as I haven't spoken Spanish much in the past year. On the whole I enjoyed the poem a lot.