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| Miz E. Mak 2005-05-19 ch 1, | awesome form and technique. I like the initiative to do something different from the norm. Great work. |
| simpleplan13 2005-05-02 ch 1, | hte endin was so sad.. amazing job |
| poetic abortion 2005-05-02 ch 1, | Beautiful. The end is sadening and I love how you mesh two different voices into one poem, how you used italics for one and regualr for your own, its brilliant. Lovely, lovely poem. Easily relatable and amazing! !~* Noelle *~! |
| Galadh Niniel 2005-05-02 ch 1, | Great job, the format is really interesting, the way it narrows done to one word in the first stanza and then broadens again in the second, and then does noth in the last stanza, it's almost like visual poetry. Having the two different speakers is a good idea as well. The poem is sad and has touched me, doesn't it reflect experiences we unfortunately all have to make in some way or other? |