great work. i love the second line. it describes them/us perfectly. i like how you put air-kissed in the middle. puts the other two epithets into perspective. there're too many phrases that i like to quote them, but "yellow pollen wound" really sticks out. very, very original description there. actually, the whole flower theme is just gorgeous. awesome job here.

i agree, there is something beautiful, yet ugly to this. Amazing imagry, and wonderful choice of words. good job!

Very strong with the imagery and the words...i loved 'indigo-bruised throat

lacerations and a drum-pulse on your tongue'. Keep writing =D

"lips pressed to the belly of a white-skirted calla lily" there's something beautiful yet ugly to this...very well done.